Alec Laine

This is chapter 2 of Silent Chaos, and it needs a lot of work! Critiques are welcome :D Every part of me, my brain, my heart, my soul, was telling ...

This is somthing I just started. I have a rough idea where I going with this, but I need it to be error-free first! Please help :D I'll help you ...

“You’re attending a party to which you were invited by your professor in History, and the one thing you chose to bring is a slice of cold pizza?” The professor ...

“ Get down, ” came Nigel’s shout. If he's shouting, I would use an exclamation mark. The metal barrel sucked the warmth from his hands . Again, a beautiful description ...

“ Come in my car ,” said Michael as he turned the key. Maybe it's just me, but I instantly turn this into a sexual reference. It might have to ...

Revelations Marcus came to school earlier than usual the next morning, hoping to see the professor in the corridor before class. His backpack was heavy, and the orb on the ...

Something to note is that isle means island. Aisle is the word you're after. You did that a few times. Thank you for correcting that. One thing that struck me ...

He was standing on one of the top levels of a multi-level car park, How many top levels does this car park have? “ But the question is, do you ...

The Book The room was very dark, lit by only a few lamps, but the orange light was obscured by feathered dresses hanging from the high shelves, casting odd shadows ...

Nigel sighed, and looked at the floor. “When I was twenty – back in 2012 – remember I left for a couple of months on a business tour in America.” ...

We crossed a line, and although fine, it was defined, and the chill felt deep in my spine. That time has come and is gone, the threads entwined are woven ...

“Then night of long knives,” said Nigel. Michael recognised that phrase from his assignment research; the assassination of Hitler’s political rivals in 1934. I'm not sure, but shouldn't it be ...

Thank you so much for the star! As you both said, the info dump does seem a bit unprofessional, so I'll change it right away. Thank you again for the ...

Hey Alec. ^_^ I'm just going to make some general suggestions and point out a couple of typos. “Just a few more minutes, mom,” sounded Marcus’s response, muffled trough the ...

History “Wake up, Lee,” Professor Adams was standing in front of the desk, on which Marcus had chosen to rest his head. The professor’s huge hands were held firmly against ...